I think maybe better structured sentences, a point each sentence, and a line between sentences.
But I'm nearly 58 so what would I know.
For the record, I wasn't 1 of the Mayne $2m - 4 year deal people. I was always of the view that it was likely front loaded and likely pretty heavily performance based.
That article just stated it goes off base amount and maynes "base" amount got freo band 2 compo so he likely IS on that (or close) amount.
So Darky using that as "proof" is backwards, it actually enhances those original claims.