Random discussion thread 3

[Beloved]

Well written, Eddie. Reckon it needs a bit of zing to make it stand out from the many other articles on the same topic. You know the boring old 'find your own voice' stuff. Watch the cliches - padding like 'let me put it to you this way' really is just that and has no place in an opinion piece particularly when you are writing to a word count. Look to add more succinct punch and good luck.

Cheers thy, I will probably leave my future works here for a bit of criticism too. Doesn't hurt to get a bit of advice on how to get better.

Might leave my Kim Duthie article here too. Had this up straight after 60 Minutes finished, pretty much as a time line of events in text for people to look back on and understand the situation to it's fullest.

Kim Duthie - A Can't-Miss St. Kilda Story

Really appreciate the help guys.

 

[Sin City]

Probably wanna edit her name out of it Ed

 

[blue gunslinger]

her name is all over Sunrise and once Kochie and Mel have you there is no hiding

 

[Mister Carlton]

her name is all over Sunrise and once Kochie and Mel have you there is no hiding

60 minutes report was absolute bullshit. No apologies. She believed that she did nothing wrong.

 

[Beloved]

Probably wanna edit her name out of it Ed

Nah mate, even before the interview, TBT were allowed to put her name into articles. It's essentially an opinion forum so nothing can be pinned in terms of breaches of privacy.

 

[thylacine60]

oh dear...

 

[The Toad]

It spelled his name wrong.

Oops

 

[Beloved]

How have you boys and girls been anyways? It has been a while since I last checked in.

 

[Sin City]

How have you boys and girls been anyways? It has been a while since I last checked in.

Bit tired. I still look great of course but I'm a bit tired.

 

[thylacine60]

If you weren't one-out on the Round 1 thread you might actually fit in some sleep, Sin. Eddie, I too am a little tired but looking smart and casual - like a quality pair of pleated slacks.

 

[bluepride]

The things I would do to you, if we were both alone in a barn.

 

[Sin City]

If you weren't one-out on the Round 1 thread you might actually fit in some sleep, Sin. Eddie, I too am a little tired but looking smart and casual - like a quality pair of pleated slacks.

Priorities Thy, priorities.

1. Looking good
2. Breaking the truth to Richmond fans
3. Extra beauty sleep



I gave up on trying to get a decent sleeping pattern a long time ago sadly.

 

[The Toad]

I'm as ugly as ****, but hey, I've got a great personality.

 

[HARKER]

I'm as ugly as ****, but hey, I've got a great personality.

Then you're not ugly mate. Not even close..

 

[The Toad]

Then you're not ugly mate. Not even close..

Gee, thanks Hark-Man.

 

[Beloved]

There's nothing wrong with a bit of platonic man love.

 

[The Toad]

There's nothing wrong with a bit of platonic man love.

So very true, EBIAC.

 

[bluepride]

I was talking about Thy.... sorry Toad, you are just too 'normal' for my liking.

 

[zeeCFC]

gaypride?

I see EBIAC is doing well for himself on TBT....wish they'd stop tripping this forum though..

 

[bluepride]

Your just jealous Zee, you want a piece of the 'pride'.

 

[zeeCFC]

bluepride is Charlie Sheen, WINNING

 

[bluepride]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ijjpmcBa-Rs

I miss the practise.

 

[Beloved]

I see EBIAC is doing well for himself on TBT...

It pays that I don't need to pay because I have none. >.>

Work is work, exposure is exposure. I need to start doing more Carlton articles.

 

[BlueBelle]

I was talking about Thy.... sorry Toad, you are just too 'normal' for my liking.

Define 'normal' these days!

 

[zeeCFC]

Define 'normal' these days!

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