my story's plot, what do you think?

[Lizzy]

i am writing a story, probably called the pretend game. here is the plot.

Guys win holiday to caribbean but all gets disturbed when war starts.guys get called into battle. current PM is making up war so he can win the pretend war to show australia he is a good PM. the guys and other soldiers put in a camp. a few die of snakes, other reasons. some purposely to injured so PM makes it look like a real war. main guys escape, come back home to reveal to everyone what is happening. recieves award. opposition leader gets handed pm , main guy meets girl.

the end.

that was very breif, hope you like it.

 

[Same Old's]